I'm back in the swing of it. I think I like it better when Lynch is not trying to do fancy intercutting. I don't mean alternating chapters of boy Lamorra and man Lamorra -- that's fine. I mean the back and forth within a short span of time in one chapter. This sort of thing can work, but in this book, these are the parts where I decide I can put the book down and read something else for a while.
I think I also find the language better when there's a longer straight narrative, although this may be my imagination. As I've said, Lynch's prose isn't as lively as Brust's at Brust's best.
My annoyance with the language doesn't get in the way of my enjoying the plot or the characters or the general story. And, I am aware that this is the kind of book where the language of Elfland and the language of Poughkeepsie cannot be kept separate. As a panel on the topic at Boskone concluded, there are books where part of the point is the blend. Nevertheless, I still prefer Brust on one end of things and Kushner on the other.
Plotwise, I've hit one of the twists agrumer told me about, Capa Basavi's decision that Locke will marry his daughter. I find that knowing about this not only did not spoil the scene, but also increased my enjoyment of it. I started this book knowing that Locke broke the Secret Peace, that someone knows about this and will try to blackmail him, that his boss wants him to marry the boss's daughter, and that he has to make a moral decision between vengeance and not letting a lot of people die. Given agrumer's complaint, I'd guess that if there isn't some third path, he gives up his vengeance. And the villain is someone who would normally be a tale's hero.
I'm wondering about the Grey King and the blackmailer, of course, and getting a lot of ideas, some of which are barely foreshadowed -- but that may be enough -- and some of which I hope are wrong simply because I find them less interesting.
I do like the way Lynch uses the city makes the map of the city useful for the reader. As panelists at a long ago Readercon once noted, not every fantasy epic needs a map. Indeed, for some, a map would make no sense or would be a spoiler. But, this book is one where the map provided is exactly correct, showing neighborhoods and waterways, but nothing more.